Thread: Writing part (FCE)

Hola,

La semana pasada me apunta ya para hacer el 8 de diciembre el FCE. Me lo estoy preparando por mi cuenta por aqui por Londres (ya que no me gusto la experiencia de ir a clase) y la parte del writing pues, la verdad, no la puedo chequear si voy bien o mal. A parte de la del speaking claro, pero las demas partes, si me los puedo preparar yo.

Bueno, que he escrito una articulo como ejercicio y me gustaría, si es posible, que me comentaseis los fallos gordos que tengo.

Muchas gracias.

The Mediterranean Diet

It is well-known the Mediterranean diet in Spain which is composed mainly by oil, vegetable, meet and fresh fish. Although it might seem that only it is cooked along Mediterranean coast, you can find it all over Spain.
Looking the major components of the diet, you can ask yourself:”what thing make the diet enjoyable?”. The way in what it is prepared. The most typical dishes are “el cocido” and “la paella”.
Some scientific studies has demonstrated that the Mediterranean diet is healthy, and even they state to drink a glass of wine each day is good for heart.
Therefore, I encourage to the reader to try this diet for a week. If you like it, you will forget the tinned food. Someone could say that it takes so long to prepare this kind of food, but you can freeze it so that you eat a delicious meal the next day without cooking!.

My contribution: the underlined words should be removed.
Good luck.!

It is well-known the Mediterranean diet in Spain which is composed mainly by oil, vegetable, meet and fresh fish.
In Spain, the Mediterranean diet which consists of oil, vegetable, meet and fresh fish is well-known.
Although it might seem that only it is only cooked along the Mediterranean coast, you can find it all over Spain.
Looking at the major components of the diet, you can ask yourself: wonder ”what thing makes the diet enjoyable?”. The way in what how it is prepared. The most typical dishes are “el cocido” and “la paella”.
Some scientific studies has have demonstrated that the Mediterranean diet is healthy, and even they even state to drink that drinking a glass of wine each day is good for one's heart.
Therefore, I encourage to the reader to try this diet for a week. If you like it, you will forget about the tinned food. Someone could say that it takes so long to prepare this kind of food, but you can freeze it so that you can eat a delicious meal the next day without cooking!.

Originally Posted by diegonel

My contribution: the underlined words should be removed.
Good luck.!

It is well-known the Mediterranean diet in Spain which is composed mainly by oil, vegetable, meet and fresh fish.
In Spain, the Mediterranean diet which consists of oil, vegetable, meet and fresh fish is well-known.
Although it might seem that only it is only cooked along the Mediterranean coast, you can find it all over Spain.
Looking at the major components of the diet, you can ask yourself: wonder ”what thing makes the diet enjoyable?”. The way in what how it is prepared. The most typical dishes are “el cocido” and “la paella”.
Some scientific studies has have demonstrated that the Mediterranean diet is healthy, and even they even state to drink that drinking a glass of wine each day is good for one's heart.
Therefore, I encourage to the reader to try this diet for a week. If you like it, you will forget about the tinned food. Someone could say that it takes so long to prepare this kind of food, but you can freeze it so that you can eat a delicious meal the next day without cooking!.

Hi Diegonel, thank you very much. Well, I believe I have no so many errors. I expected much many errors...

I am reading the book "First Certificate in English 3" where there are some writings with its marks (Band 4, Band 3 and so on) and I am not doing so bad, aren't I? ;-)

For marking the writings, they take into account the following points:

a) Content: it is very good arguable or described.
b) Organisation and cohesion: Well organised and using a linking devices.
c) Range: range of structures and vocabulary
d) Accuracy: the reading is fluently and doesn't impede the comunication.
e ) Appropiacy of of register and format:
f ) Target reader: fulfil the target reader (be informed properly)


http://www.cambridgeesol.org/teach/b...writing_81.pdf

Thank you very much...

Riper,
I couldn't tell you how strict the exam is about grammar and language. But I can tell you to be careful with
subject concordance:
what thing makes the diet
studies has have demonstrated that
verb pattern:
they even state to drink that drinking a glass of win
I encourage to the reader to try
What about the number of words? Isn't it too short?

Regards,
Diego

Originally Posted by diegonel

Riper,
I couldn't tell you how strict the exam is about grammar and language. But I can tell you to be careful with
subject concordance:
what thing makes the diet
studies has have demonstrated that
verb pattern:
they even state to drink that drinking a glass of win
I encourage to the reader to try
What about the number of words? Isn't it too short?

Regards,
Diego

Hi Diego,

Yes, I will have carefulness about that ;-).

The numbers of words is about 120-150 words.
I will post others writtings.

Regards.