Thread: Short funeral poem..translation accuracy?!!

Originally Posted by Jay74

I am a small town funeral director who is working with a Spanish speaking family. They chose a poem for memorial folders and wanted translated into Spanish. I think I have the words translated right, but I want to see if there are any special changes needed for the poetic aspect. Any advice or help would be very appreciated by myself and the family I am helping.

English poem:
A Father Gone
Gone is a Father loved by all,
His soul is now at rest.
He'll sleep in peace, his work is done,
a father's work, the best.
He will know the joy of perfect rest,
In Heaven up above.
Where he may well contentedly,
Protected by God's love.
Our hearts may grieve that he must lie
Beneath the sacred sod,
And ye we know he lives in peace within the house of God.

This is the translation I have:

Un Padre Ido

Ido es un padre adorado por todo,

su alma está ahora parada.
El dormirá en la paz, su worke es hecho,
un trabajo de padre es el mejor.
El sabrá la alegría del descanso perfecto,
en el cielo arriba arriba, donde
él puede morar con satisfacción,
protegido por el amor de Dios.
Los corazones pueden gieve que él
debe mentir bajo el césped sagrado.
Mas sabemos que él vive en la paz


dentro de la casa de Dios.



Thanks again for any advice.

I think it will be necessary to polish it a little

Un padre se ha ido
Ha partido un padre amado por todos
Ahora su alma descansa
Dormirá en paz. Su tarea terminó,
Su labor como padre fue la mejor
Conocerá la alegría del descanso perfecto
en el alto Cielo
donde morará feliz protegido por el amor de Dios
Nuestros corazones están tristes porque yace bajo el suelo sagrado
Y sin embargo, sabemos que vive en paz en la casa de Dios.

This would be a rather literal translation. I'm sure one of our friends can write a more poetical version

So long

Eulalia

Hola David y Eulalia:
Me gustan sus dos versiones que a la vez son tan diferentes. Una pequeña corrección para David:
En el último verso, faltaría la preposición "en": "Más sabemos que él vive en paz...
Jay, I´m sure these 2 versions have been of great help. Let us know!

You´re right... oops...

I like them both too. Jay74, I think you can choose either of them because they are both correct and meaningful.

Good luck, I hope this helps.