Thread: Algo de mi inspiracion...

Hola Fontana,

Ponenos tu intento en ingles y te ayudamos a mejorarlo.

Saludos

Gracias joselas!

I wrote this text and I would like to know my mistakes and the best suggestions to express my feelings. These were my inspired lines...

" I believe in the magic of music and in its wonderful effect of opening up hearts like flowers. I believe in the rapture of music and in its songs (that/what/which) shoot you not to hurt you, just to choose you and then, illuminate you. I believe in songs that can stop the hit in time and the time at one time. I believe in songs that can move us away from sadness and its damned company, the pain. I also believe that a single song would be enough to heal us or make us ill, destroy us or save us...
This is the story of a fragmented heart or maybe the story of our fragmented hearts..."

Now, I will try to explain you a little bit my doubts...como por ejemplo con its, esta relacionado a pertenencia. No se si esta correcto asi...

Acerca de rapture, Elegi esa palabra porque denota mas un secuestro o abducion. Otra opcion es trance pero rapto me resulta mas "profundo"

Acerca de that/what/which...Creo que cualquiera puede ser usada pero no se cual es mejor...

Acerca de hit, tengo muchas dudas con esta oracion. Creo que la primera parte esta clara, pero luego...I try to say when the music stops the time in one snap or something like that...

Gracias una vez mas joselas. Ojala puedas seguir ayudandome

Thanks for being there!

Cheers!

Hola fontana, a ver si puedo ayudar en algo:

Music and Rapture always go together. I´ve always heard various phrases about the "rapture of music" etc so I would choose that and not Trance.

Acerca de that/what/which... Definitely not What, that doesn´t make sense. I would go with Which.

Acerca de hit, I agree it´s tricky. I would write, "I believe in songs that can stop the HANDS OF time." y punto.

Espero haberte ayudado

Hey susie123!

Thank you so much for your help!

This is my last version of my text...

I believe in the magic of music and in its wonderful effect of opening up hearts like flowers.
I believe in the rapture of music and in its songs that shoot you not to hurt you, just to choose you and then, illuminate you.
I believe in songs that holding back the blow in the nick of time and make time stop suddenly.
I believe in songs that can take us away from sadness and its damned company, the pain.
I also believe that a single song would be enough to heal us or make us ill, to destroy us or save us...
This is the story of a fragmented heart or maybe the story of our fragmented hearts...

Any that would be which?

About the tricky sentence, another option is...

I believe in songs that stop the blow on time and the time suddenly...

Please, feel free to say me anything to get a right translation because this text will be a kind of short brief of my project...

Thanks again!

Thanks vicente!

I choose...shoot you, because I want to be more dramatic...como si las canciones fueran balas que dispara la musica...or something like that, talking in metaphoric way...

Making just few changes, this is the text...

I believe in the magic of music and in its wonderful effect of opening up hearts like flowers.
I believe in the rapture of music and in its songs that shoot you, not to hurt you, just to choose you and then enlighten you.
I believe in those songs that can hold back the blow in time and stop the time suddenly.
I believe in songs that can take us away from sadness and its cursed companion, the pain.
I also believe that a single song would be enough to heal us or make us ill, to destroy us or save us...
This is the story of a fragmented heart or maybe the story of our fragmented hearts...

I hope this is the final version.
Thanks again for your help!