(Translation practice) Hantavirus pneumonia: why in some cases it could be deadly

(I'm practicing translation by translate some random texts from electronic newspapers. I appreciate all the corrections and advice. Thank you)


Hantavirus pneumonia: why in some cases it could be deadly
The disease produces in the country more than 100 cases per year and even though the long-tailed colilargo is the principal vector for the virus, the outbreak that develops in the south presented the particularity of person-to-person transmission. In the most serious cases, the lack of oxygenation and the circulatory collapse put in danger the patient life.


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Hi, if you want us to correct your translation, you should include the original text.

I will help you with some grammar mistakes:

I'm practising translation by translating random texts from online newspapers. I appreciate all the corrections and advice. Thank you)
Hantavirus pneumonia: why it can be deadly in some cases
The disease produces more than 100 cases per year and even though the long-tailed colilargo is the principal vector for the virus, the outbreak that develops in the south presented the particularity of person-to-person transmission. In the most serious cases, the lack of oxygenation and the circulatory collapse put in danger the patient life.

Ok, the last part I think you should have it corrected by someone who understands the subject and is ideally a native English speaker.

"Produces" es una españolada en este contexto. Mejor así: "The disease causes more than 100 cases per year and even though the long-tailed colilargo is the principal vector for the virus, the outbreak developing in the south presented the particularity of person-to-person transmission. In the most serious cases, the lack of oxygenation and the circulatory collapse endangers the patient’s life/puts the patient’s life at risk."