Thread: I need some help with one song, please

Hi
Could someone help me, please?
Is this song right?:

you lost your fears
trying hard to be a dogged kid
on your own
wolfing down all your pills
who do you belong to?

do you wanna see the sunrise with a lemon ice cream?
memories of childhood break

the son who is on the run
falling from the rope

tell me, why hospitals need a hostage?
You could run away and forget this madness
kiss the nurse or rape the doctor, yeah!
all your know-all friends expect you to fail

a son's coming alone from a broken home

a kind of love that kills, somedays
it comes when your soul needs some help
day by day it digs your grave
did you buy any rose to leave there?

what do you wanna do with this hate of yours?
someone sells faith to fall in grace
but innocence is gone, and things are done
Mr joe, hit the atmosphere

Mr Joe, please hit the atmosphere
outside there's a brand new sin
waiting for you, come
come Mr Joe

Thank you very much (is "a lot" rigth?)

What exactly do you need? you translated it yourself? you wrote it?

Thanks for the answers!!

The lyric is mine. I think it's right but I wanna be sure about it cos' we are gonna make a record.
Thanks!!

Sounds fine to me.

"Thank you very much" is more formal. "Thanks a lot" (or just "Thanks") is more common. Both are fine here.

Thank you very much!!
Best regards