Thread: Traducción de un mensaje para servicio público - ayuda con frase que rima

Hola todos, estoy trabajando una traducción donde tengo que dirigir un mensaje de seguridad a los dueños de mascotas sobre las playas y las contracorrientes en el norte de California. Por ahorita estoy atorado en la frase: "don't dive in let them swim." direccionando que los perros son mas aptos a salir de contracorrientes; es una rima para recordarse de la seguridad del agua y me gustaría mantener la rima si posible.

Esto es lo que tengo por ahora:

1. No te metas deja que naden.
2. no entres deja que naden.
3. no nades deja que naden.
4. no pases deja que naden.

¿Qué piensa ud.?

Don't forget to use the comma as recommended by matiasc! It's always a challenge, but whenever I see what it looks like a mistake in the source I make sure I do not transfer that into my translation. ;-) At any rate, this will not jeopardize the rhyming.

Hello,
I'd suggest option 4 if you have to choose one of those. This option will give you a vocalic rhyme without repeating the verb "nadar".

I would use options 1 or 4, either one...and the "," as well

Hello,

Thank you to everyone who replied. With your help, I figured a better rhyme that seemed to carry the tone of the original. In the Spanish version of the translation I directly translated from english to Spanish, "no te metas y dejalos nadar," it worked with the tone of the background music (This PSA was planned to be recorded as part of a video). Thanks for the good energy!

more than happy to help!

You are welcome. I am glad that it works with the music. That's another element to consider if you want to adapt the message for your target audience.

Preferiría que usaras "No te metas, deja que naden." porque al ser un mandato u orden se usa el modo imperativo.